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"Confusion" is a very good title for your poem, it really fits. Is there even something like "right" and "wrong"? Wouldn't that be thinking in black and white, without shades of grey? I like that this poem consists mainly of questions, and ones that make the reader think nonetheless, which is always a good thing. One thing I noticed though is that you tried to seperate/highlight certain words in some lines through double spaces. This disturbs the flow of reading a little, so it may be better to set them italics instead.
Other than that, it's an amazing poem again! Keep up the great work!
(shayan many dom be englisy chi mishe,mikham begam be dome parande faghat negah koind....in jomlaro baram engilisisho befrest)