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In this eternal battle of light and darkness  which side is right?
The one which has complete might?
The one which has a word named light?
Where does  the  darkness road end?
To the Land of the coward men?
Will this road lead us to hell?
Or does it have heaven's tales to tell?
What will be the road to paradise?
Is it a game won by a dice?
Or Is it a long road with our life's price?
What will we do with this thoughts?
Will we believe  in god's cross?
Or will we choose the moon a sign of lights loom?
Or will we at last fall and serve to darkness claw?
To calamity and chaos law?
All of this questions in our minds
Whispering till there are finds
What will we do in the end?
Will we find a way to ascend  Or in the end to the valley of shadows we will  descend?

BY Shayan Shahsavary

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Truly what will we do with all these decisions?

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=Riemea Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yet another well written work of yours. Your poems are deep and I can see that much thought went into them, this one is no exeption.

"Confusion" is a very good title for your poem, it really fits. Is there even something like "right" and "wrong"? Wouldn't that be thinking in black and white, without shades of grey? I like that this poem consists mainly of questions, and ones that make the reader think nonetheless, which is always a good thing. One thing I noticed though is that you tried to seperate/highlight certain words in some lines through double spaces. This disturbs the flow of reading a little, so it may be better to set them italics instead.

Other than that, it's an amazing poem again! Keep up the great work!
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~Shayan-Nayash Jul 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
once again thanks for awesome comment :)
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=Riemea Jul 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :)
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:icondemonrobber:
If we don't believe in God does that mean we cannot enter Heaven? If we do good but are attracted to the darker side of life will we still find paradise? I can understand the confusion. I believe we choose our own destiny.
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~Shayan-Nayash May 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Great comprehending.I respect your point of view it's one of the best
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*MonaParvin May 30, 2012  Professional
Just amazing dear Shayan :)
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~Shayan-Nayash May 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
tnx a lot dear Mona :)
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:iconleonms:
nice
(shayan many dom be englisy chi mishe,mikham begam be dome parande faghat negah koind....in jomlaro baram engilisisho befrest)
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~Shayan-Nayash May 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
tnx
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