This story may look generic at first but later everything will change completely I assure you and I don't intend to offend any beliefs From dawn of time three realms existed: 1-EARTH REALM OF HUMANS 2-HEAVEN REALM OF ANGELS 3-HELL REALM OF DEMONS
A balance existed between them which was made because of some people named [[Controllers]] who were chosen humans of their generation and had an essence of balance in their soul. In realm of humans none other than Controllers would know about other two realms even some of controllers didn’t know anything. The controllers were protected by chosen demons and angels. All of them strong or wise or skilled in their own way everything was in this way until demons broke the rules and killed the Chosen ones and tried to take all three realms this lead to a fierce war and humanity nearly annihilated Angels defeated demons and pushed demons back to hell and stated if any demon is seen on earth it will be slain without hesitation then angels removed the memory of remaining few humans and decided to never show themselves to humans but only protect them. Meanwhile Demons realm was in eternal chaos for throne of hell until after 4 thousand years a powerful demon named [[BLACKNESS]] rebelled from a small village named “Ashes of Grave” he gathered an army and defeated all of his rivals and became the king of hell He wasn’t a tyrant at all but overtime he became a slave of his lust and he made many succubuses and female demons his own. Who all wanted to make their own son king so they killed each other’s children in stealth. From those Children only five survived:
1-Retribution [A.K.A Blood] 2-Pride 3-Ignorance[A.K.A H-W-O-A-R happy without a reason XD] 4-Wrath 5-Melancholy[A.K.A Shadow]
Blood is the oldest brother who is going to become a king he is a chivalrous prince and does anything to protect his family Pride is very self centered and greedy Ignorance just wants to have a good time XD Wrath looks up to his oldest half brother a lot [More about these brothers later ] And finally Melancholy: Age: 19
Sex: Male
Height: 1 meters and 84 centimeters
Weight: around 165 lbs
Personality and life: He is probably the most kindhearted creature in hell. He is misunderstood and really no one pays much attention to him that’s why he spends most of his time alone in a jungle named [[shadows of the past]] a place where sad guilty humans souls flee to from jails of hell. These souls talk to melancholy a lot also many secrets lie in this forest which he discovers them over time other than this place he hangs in a bar named [[liquid flame]] and talks to bartender and drinks a lot to forget his pain of being so much alone. He and his brother Wrath are very close also melancholy respects Blood his half brother a lot. He also helps the poor a lot and tries to take their sadness away even if he feels bombarded by this feeling has no claim to the throne and dislikes ruling. He has a bird named sorrow which can trace nearly anyone melancholy wants this bird is loved by him and means a lot to him
Battle status: Between 10’000 greatest warriors of hell, Melancholy is ranked 666th This rank is something that warriors can earn from entering a competition which is held every year in hell.
Equipment and powers: 1-double swords named: twin twilight 2-double pistols named: Doom and Death[these pistols aren’t shown in the picture but Melancholy is most skilled with his guns] 3-a dagger with hidden powers named: Light[which is a keepsake from melancholy’s mother ] 4-Fireballs combined with sorrow which are floating on his shoulders 5-HARBINGER OF SORROW: which is concentrated power made of grief and sadness that turns into a giant phantom of a crow like bird which damages enemies severely if it contacts them. 6-limited ability to fly 7-A black Horse he can summon from any shadow 8-…[tired to say all of it right now]
THIS PART IS A BIT +18 SO…[lol not too much just a bit ] The Story of birth: In the time of chaos Blackness was a powerful creature by himself but not strong enough to defeat all his enemies he was powerful and had a sense of justice so angels chose him to become the ruler of hell so they sent 10 incredibly powerful angels who aided him. Between blackness and one of angels named light a romance formed. After the battles when blackness became a king only 3 angels remained alive: light, joy who was light’s sister and youth who secretly loved light. King of heaven[a very powerful angel in my story] ordered 3 angels to sign a peace treaty with demons and make sure that demons stay in hell Blackness accepted this and swore to stand by this treaty. Light who loved blackness asked the king of heaven to let her stay beside blackness but king refused and answered: the only result of this will be your death so three angels returned to heaven and while blackness couldn’t see his true love the lust within him grow day by day till he became an slave of his lust and became father of many children like Blood Pride and Ignorance until light found a way to hell and started to meet blackness secretly. After sometime angels found the way light used and blocked [they didn’t know who used the way] so light was stuck in heaven but she had two fruits from her forbidden love melancholy and wrath. She hid this fact and kept herself away from other angels the only person who knew this was her sister joy until youth found out about this when she gave birth to melancholy and wrath. He who always loved light now was burning with envy that blackness has taken light from him so he told about this to king of heaven. The king ordered light arrested and burned, light found out about this and asked her sister to save her children if she gets arrested joy accepted. So they went to the blocked way and tried to make their way to hell but light was arrested and only joy made her way to there. Light was accused of treason and burned. Many angels who knew what a pure and good person light was or respected her as a paragon and an archangel rebelled but they were killed too.joy made it to the palace of blackness and told him what has happened. He broke the treaty and swore to kill youth, king and all those who follow king of heaven and youth. He also stated that joy can stay in his palace and raise wrath and melancholy as their mother. She was already a wanted person in heaven so she accepted.
Well that’s it for now[*dies from typing*] oh and one more thing the main story begins at 2040 when humanity is quite advanced and technology is used in all of the realms, so anyways I hope you like Melancholy’s personality and his design.
Taking a photo from the work has reduced it’s quality but I had no other choice Done with some random etode and color pencils[that's all the equipment I have right now XD]
Sorry if I misspelled anything in passage I wrote all of this very fast and sorry if this was too long.
Comments, Faves, Critiques much much much appreciated
Very nice work! The story was really fascinating, and I can't wait to see some more! The details are great, and the characters are really interesting.
For the picture, I like the colors! I really like how you did the wings, and the details are great!
However, I feel as if his chest muscles are a bit too defined. It's okay to have a super-muscled guy, but the muscles should be a little more square than round. Also, the abs are a good size, but I'd recommend either widening them, or making the line that closes them off on the outside (the line nearest his arm on each side) a bit lighter. Finally, I feel as if his head is a touch small, compared to his shoulders and chest.
But overall, REALLY cool story! I can't wait to see more about your three Realms! Keep on going!
You are a very talented artist! I've never seen anything quite like your drawings, they all include a lot of detail and story behind them. Keep up the great work!
Again, the bright colors really bring emphasis to those parts, and I think you used that a little better in this one - especially with all the swords and around the head. You also did a little more shading around the outside, which looks great!
Anatomy-wise, everything looks pretty good! I did notice pretty quickly that his left arm is a little short and 'chubby,' if that makes any sense. The right arm looks great, especially with the fingers extended and all. I also think the bird adds a nice ouch on top, there.
I assume you scan your drawings in? They seem a little dark to me, and that results in a lot of detail.. try brightening them up a little in an editing program like Photoshop, Gimp, or an online program like [link]
Wow! This is so cool~!! The only suggestion is to use some punctuation marks and slow down and breathe,..find a flow and the reading will be easier and paint a nice picture of the story..you keep it going and I admire your dedication and drive~~!! Hugs and keep it real
I find the story very interesting. I would love to read more. It's very detailed, Which I like. I like the picture a lot. The subtle colours add a bit of mystery to the character. I wonder however, If you planned on doing a full colour version? I think it might be interesting to see this piece in bright vivid colour to better set his location. Especially the background. I definitely look forward to seeing more and reading more about this character.
Thanks a lot I plan on drawing him later in different situations too and when I hopefully get a tablet with full colors and much more detailed.but you kno this piece is also kind of full colored because his skin is very pale
The details are great, and the characters are really interesting.
For the picture, I like the colors! I really like how you did the wings, and the details are great!
However, I feel as if his chest muscles are a bit too defined. It's okay to have a super-muscled guy, but the muscles should be a little more square than round.
Also, the abs are a good size, but I'd recommend either widening them, or making the line that closes them off on the outside (the line nearest his arm on each side) a bit lighter.
Finally, I feel as if his head is a touch small, compared to his shoulders and chest.
But overall, REALLY cool story! I can't wait to see more about your three Realms!
Again, the bright colors really bring emphasis to those parts, and I think you used that a little better in this one - especially with all the swords and around the head. You also did a little more shading around the outside, which looks great!
Anatomy-wise, everything looks pretty good! I did notice pretty quickly that his left arm is a little short and 'chubby,' if that makes any sense. The right arm looks great, especially with the fingers extended and all. I also think the bird adds a nice ouch on top, there.
I assume you scan your drawings in? They seem a little dark to me, and that results in a lot of detail.. try brightening them up a little in an editing program like Photoshop, Gimp, or an online program like [link]
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