Sta.sh
A year began with the call of war
Spring which was like birth of a star
now has become an unsealable scar
Roses started to wither in war's presence
Death and doom were named nature's present
A season passed and hearts were broken
All that remained from a child was a token
A rag doll which saw humans brutality
A rag doll which was missing true humanity
Summer passed and autumn came
Conflict between humans couldn't be tamed
Remaining yellow and orange leaves started to fall from the trees
Which Indicated Lost lives of humans which will never be free
Autumn fled and when everything was dead
Snow of winter covered remnants of human bones
The frozen world seemed so silent and alone
This snow was made of crystallized innocents tears
The frozen world was made of cold blood and fears
The humanity lost it's valuable meaning
The world was emptied from any feeling
Not even one grave remained engraved with "Rest In Peace"
And the only thing that remained was a forlorn dream of peace.
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I like the topic you chose for this poem, and the way you tie different emotions to the seasons is amazing! You also wrote the passing of the seasons and the happenings very well; I like the last two lines of your poem best. The words rhyme nicely, although not all of your lines rhyme. That's totally fine though, in my opinion, in fact I think it adds to the poem. There's only one tiny thing: I think it'd be better to set a dot at the end of the last line. That's only my opinion though, I think it'd give the whole piece a sense of finality and a clear end. But maybe that's not what you want, and the poem is great either way
Altogether it's a very well written poem! Great job!